Lucifer In Celestial Gardens
Very ominous cover. Well done. A couple of oddities in the synopsis. The comma after A.J. Harris and “their lifestyles are told.” Fairly amusing first paragraph. How important a name is! I like how you tell the backstory directly. Too many authors try to slip it in with over-obvious exposition.
“actually suck-up to her unabashedly” – funny! I love the theater scenes, p. 17. An intriguing twist with Kitty Monahan. I imagine an undertaker would know many of a town’s secrets. p. 38. The tale is nicely complex, with many elements for the reader to sort through, p. 72. The dialogues are sharp and compelling, p. 108. A good description of the accident. That’s how they happen, of course, suddenly and with little awareness, p. 136.
An intriguing line of questioning at the trial. It’s fun to watch sharp lawyers in action, and you have a good sense for judicial proceedings, p. 169. “What would I argue with, the corpse?” – funny! p. 204.
The dialogue seems oddly formal, p. 229. The transformation of Bull is an interesting and hopeful turn, p. 259. “I could have told him we had a head start…” Your humor is an everpresent and welcome element, p. 295. A compelling revelation at p. 325! Very imaginative.